Fragile

Critique: Fragile by scpyrus

It's nice to see you branching out from free verse and traditional forms. I love the concept creating fragility out of the violence of an experience, and the descriptive wordage is very nice. Pieces with violent imagery seem much more popular than those without I've found. *mulls that over for a bit*

In traditional Japanese language Haiku there are only 3 rules:

line one five syllables
line two seven syllables
line three five syllables

I had never actually researched haiku in other languages until today when I was surprised to learn that the standard 17 total syllable rule had exceptions (omg just try one in française @ 5,7,5).

In English the only rules are (oh how I love my Wiki) (reminds self to post a rather ludely suggestive poem I once wrote about my love of Wiki):

Use of three lines of up to 17 syllables;
Use of a season word (kigo);
Use of a cut or kire (sometimes indicated by a punctuation mark) to compare two images implicitly.

Here's the Wiki English Haiku link for you: [link]

Good work my friend.